AUTHOR: Phy DATE: 8/08/2003 10:41:00 AM ----- BODY: From the moment he first laid eyes on the stormfortresses of Aerie, Anatole Dale knew he just *had* to get him one of those.

He closed the hatch and dropply nimbly to the verdant forest floor. Normally, he would have fallen backward onto the inviting carpet and revelled in the smell and feel of life, but his entire attention was on the castle he saw rising up out of the mammoth thunderhead in the distance. He strode purposefully to a gap in the pines and blindly reached out with his right hand, idly touching it while keeping his gaze fixed on the sight in front of him.

It appeared like any other stormcloud except that it had this perfectly good castle built amidst the clouds. There were spires and arches and great halls. The only difference was that they were floating half a click or more high in the sky.

He leaned in closer to the tree, resting his cheek on his right hand, and considered.

After a pleasant while, he pushed restlessly away from the tree and strode forward. He had a lot of distance to cover to make it to the nearest village before nightfall, and he desperately wanted to watch the lightshow with a mug of something alcoholic in his hand.

. . .

I was screaming when I awoke. -------- AUTHOR: Phy DATE: 8/07/2003 05:14:00 PM ----- BODY: You have to start somewhere. I've been looking for a hook. I'm thinking of trying this one on for size:

"From the moment he first laid eyes on the stormfortresses of Aerie, Anatole Dale knew he *had* to get him one of those."

Yeah, I know I was thinking of starting off with Kish but if I start with Dale in the third person and then follow up with alternating chapters about Kish written in the first person, I think it will establish the order correctly, AD is the old, Kish is the new.

We'll see how it goes. -------- AUTHOR: Phy DATE: 8/07/2003 11:28:00 AM ----- BODY: I implemented a free Comments section courtesy of Squawkbox so that people can respond to prior posts. The order appears to be 1) No comments yet, 2) Comment, 3) Comments(number).

Now you can post new posts or respond to existing ones. --------